…but I did get a good review from someone net to WriteWords, even if they did think that T E SHEPHERD was a girl… 😉
I really like the way you frequently switch between different characters’ p.o.v.s, it kept my attention.
I also love the way you imply that the first section was all just Ben’s dream (at this point I started to think – oh, that old trick, how unoriginal). Then we find out that the part about Helen wasn’t a dream after all. So, there are a few good twists in a short space.
I’m not sure how it makes me feel to start a story with such a tragic, upsetting episode, but then I’m into more upbeat stuff (but that’s just me!).
I really must get back to my revision work!
How does one – indeed, can just anyone – join Write Words? I think you said they deal only with YA novels?? Or did I just dream that? 😉
Just go here: http://www.writewords.org.uk/ and sign up. You can sign up for a trial, which allows you to upload one piece of work (no editing of it once it’s up there though) and to post comments and forum messages. To upload more pieces and get access to some of the other areas of the site you have to pay but it’s only about £35 a year.
The site is divided up into groups, of which I’m a member of the YA group but you belong to as many or as few as you like…
Thanks! As you can see, I’ve signed up for my trial 🙂 I joined the Novel II group (trial members can join only one group during a 1-month period). I guess I’ll see how I like it before forking out for membership 🙂